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    Master Sorcerer JOSHIE63's Avatar
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    Default Judgement Day | Chapter 1

    Basically, the current predicament I am at makes me cringe far too hard when I take a look bad at NFV (which I must continue whether it kills me or not), so I have decided to make it up by sharing something predrafted. I need feedback anyway, so do not hesitate.

    These will also be shorter, as I am simply testing this concept out. By no means am I decent author — just a kid who enjoys writing.

    CHAPTER 1 | Part 1
    MUMBLE

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    I like the writing and the topic (story? situation?) is interesting as well and it has me wondering about other aspects of Dylan's life.
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    What a strange kid.
    So erm... Hi.

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    N I C E V O C A B U L A R Y
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    No need to use too many big words imo, but I got hooked on the story.

    Nice job.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Areodax View Post
    No need to use too many big words.
    Yeah he does that a lot

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