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MidasTouch
12-06-2015, 08:52 PM
First Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?282568-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Excerpt-from-Book-by-MidasTouch

Second Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?282771-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Second-Page

Third Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?283186-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Third-Page

Fourth Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?283234-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Fourth-Page&p=2034633#post2034633

Fifth Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?283244-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Fifth-Page

Sixth Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?283294-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Sixth-Page&p=2035222#post2035222

Seventh Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?283538-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Seventh-Page&p=2037613#post2037613

Eighth Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?283602-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Eighth-Page&p=2038258#post2038258

Ninth Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?283845-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Ninth-Page

Tenth Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?284133-The-Man-of-the-HBP-Tenth-Page&p=2043103#post2043103

PART 2 OUT HOLY ASS

First Page -- http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?285273-The-Man-of-Heat-First-Page

Second Page coming soon if you know what i mean


you can also ask me questions about it here and ill answer but this story isnt really that popular here since u guys cant read lol im just playing i love you

PolarisHD
12-06-2015, 08:58 PM
1. What is the synopsis of the story or in other words, what is the story about?

2. What does HBP mean?

|ThyLuigi|
12-06-2015, 09:01 PM
Just read the third page and...it's great. Absolutely exhilarating and had me wondering what they're going to do in the fourth one.

MidasTouch
12-06-2015, 09:03 PM
1. What is the synopsis of the story or in other words, what is the story about?

2. What does HBP mean?

The story is about a japanese/american boy willing to risk lives to destroy america in modern day 2001.


It stand's for High blood pressure. Telling why it's called that would spoil the story.

Bruce Wayne
12-06-2015, 09:03 PM
I can't read it.

Spoilers are broken on mobile, stupid vBulliten developers not testing a key feature on Mobile.

MidasTouch
12-06-2015, 09:03 PM
Just read the third page and...it's great. Absolutely exhilarating and had me wondering what they're going to do in the fourth one.

thank u so much i swear i love u

Bruce Wayne
12-06-2015, 09:04 PM
The story is about a japanese/american boy willing to risk lives to destroy america in modern day 2001.


It stand's for High blood pressure. Telling why it's called that would spoil the story.

why is it called that.

PolarisHD
12-06-2015, 09:13 PM
The story is about a japanese/american boy willing to risk lives to destroy america in modern day 2001.


It stand's for High blood pressure. Telling why it's called that would spoil the story.

Seems interesting. I'll try reading it. Will put my reactions and stuff in this post via edit.

Edit (Warning: Contains spoilers):

Part 1:
First page:
"He is more American than the red-necks that his mom brings home every night" Lmao.

Damn. Those last lines are badass. I'm really liking the story so far.

Second page:
Seems like the MC will have a harem. As a harem lover, I'd be really pleased if this happens.

Third page:
"Hideki said as he twirled his curly hair by one finger." Was it like this?

https://lh4.googleusercontent.com/proxy/qMaGHSD-r5vSaLmh-NbyJoZ9uv7GdBGzCZkwdZypKX4SqYIjm_behJ75Ha4-MedpzXMTHbul=w500-h281-nc

Nice Gintama reference(?).

R.I.P. Mr. Dick

Fourth page:
Seems like some :poop: is going to go down.

I ship Juliet and Hideki.

Really excited for the 5th page. I usually just ignore stories in the forum, but when I saw that the one who made this story is [are you hiding your identity?], I decided to give it a try. Glad I didn't ignore this thread.

Fifth page:

I feel like that the conversation with the police officer about the book he was reading was foreshadowing something big.

Hideki is alpha as ----.

Lmao at "Call me!". Seems like Hideki has a MILF in his harem. With 3 girls liking him, the harem is now established. I am extremely pleased.

That scared me for a bit. I thought the waitress was going to die.

Great story as always.

Sixth page:
Hideki creates a harem anywhere he goes. lmao

That cliffhanger tho. Really excited to read the next chapter

Seventh page:
And thus, Hideki's harem got bigger. Won't be surprised if every woman he meets falls in love with him.

And yet again, I got scared there for a little bit. Taylor was such a nice character even though she only had a few screen time.

Seems like Hideki is slowly getting kind. Either that or he just has a soft spot for girls.

R.I.P. Lowry, but I feel like that he is still alive. My guess is that he'd come back without his right/left shin.

I just imagined Hideki being a tsundere when he went out the door while saying "Annoying". lol

This story is really underrated.

Eight page:
Skyla sleeping on Hideki's lap was really sweet.

I couldn't really imagine some burn scars forming a Japanese flag, but that's pretty cool.

Yep. Lowry is alive. lol

Holy :poop:. I did not see that coming. Seems like Hideki now has an enemy that is on his level.

Can't wait to see the two of them fight the next chapter.

Ninth page:
Even though they didn't 1v1, that was intense as hell.

So in the end, Julia and Skyla sided with Roy. Was pretty bummed out, but I was expecting that since they weren't that psychotic.

Wait, is this the end? I don't see something like "Tenth page coming soon". Hopefully not, since there would be a lot of questions that are left unanswered like "Does Hideki die?".

Tenth page:
Nice Oregairu reference.

Hideki is now on the same level as Roy. Nice.

*** R.I.P. Juliet

Hachiman too OP

Hideki is so strong that he can just impregnate a woman just by tapping into her stomach lol. Was it the HBP's power or was it Hideki's?

R.I.P. Juliet x Hideki ship. Whose father is it? The narrator said it Hideki gave Juliet Roy's child, but Juliet said it was Hideki's.

Was really surprised at that plot twist wherein Hideki said that he asked Juliet to be in his tram not because of her being good with chemical stuff, but because she was the healthiest woman Hideki knew to bear his child.

I wondered if the recent stuff going on was all along Hideki's plan. If it isn't, then what was the purpose of Juliet bearing his child?

Those fighting scenes were intense. Had me at the edge of my seat.

Nice way to end Part 1. Can't wait for Part 2. Will definitely read it once it comes out.

Part 2:
First page:
How is Hide 16 when his mother is 21?

Never expected Juliet to be with Gintoki. lol

So Gintoki is now a nice guy. I wonder what happened.

Now that answers the question from my previous review.

Seems like Hideki is going to be killed by Hide. Based on the book the cop was reading.

Great start.

MidasTouch
12-06-2015, 09:18 PM
Seems interesting. I'll try reading it. Will put my reactions and stuff in this post via edit.

thanks fam

MidasTouch
12-06-2015, 09:37 PM
Added a page.

MidasTouch
12-06-2015, 10:05 PM
Third page:
"Hideki said as he twirled his curly hair by one finger." Was it like this?

https://lh4.googleusercontent.com/proxy/qMaGHSD-r5vSaLmh-NbyJoZ9uv7GdBGzCZkwdZypKX4SqYIjm_behJ75Ha4-MedpzXMTHbul=w500-h281-nc

Nice Gintama reference(?).

R.I.P. Mr. Dick

Yes it was like that yes its a small reference and mr dick is homosexual im just throwing that out there as a fun fact

MidasTouch
12-06-2015, 10:52 PM
Bumped and also Added a new page.

- - - Updated - - -


Really excited for the 5th page. I usually just ignore stories in the forum, but when I saw that the one who made this story is [are you hiding your identity?], I decided to give it a try. Glad I didn't ignore this thread.

i am just so i dont get cough you know

and thanks for giving it a chance i ****ing love you

PolarisHD
12-06-2015, 11:07 PM
Bumped and also Added a new page.

- - - Updated - - -



i am just so i dont get cough you know

and thanks for giving it a chance i ****ing love you

https://encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcQPY0mEV_SlVXoQ0q0KeQ19cBkW_TzQN M3FaaUZrVVpkZplzopXMA

Tempting
12-07-2015, 01:01 AM
I expect to see a copyright complaint when the last page has been uploaded. It could happen.

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 01:09 AM
I expect to see a copyright complaint when the last page has been uploaded. It could happen.

i dont understand what you mean fam

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 01:49 AM
just gonna leave this bump here while i write page 7

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 02:34 AM
New Page Added+

GummiBear64
12-07-2015, 02:44 AM
I'm lovin' it!

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 03:12 AM
I'm lovin' it!

thx fam i rlly appreciate this

JOSHIE63
12-07-2015, 03:34 AM
Pretty good overall. Keep it up!

You writing like three additions in a day makes me feel lazy so…

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 04:00 AM
Pretty good overall. Keep it up!

You writing like three additions in a day makes me feel lazy so…

thanks fam i gotchu

JOSHIE63
12-07-2015, 04:45 AM
thanks fam i gotchu

Hakma, you always got me. I need to get you late night when you need my love.

But besides my being over-obsessive, the story is good. I like how at some points you circumnavigate direct adjectives and use a seterotyping comparison. Quite uniqueand frankly, something that could be used more in all modern-day writing.

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 05:03 AM
Hakma, you always got me. I need to get you late night when you need my love.

But besides my being over-obsessive, the story is good. I like how at some points you circumnavigate direct adjectives and use a seterotyping comparison. Quite uniqueand frankly, something that could be used more in all modern-day writing.
thanks fam I got u 2night

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 12:28 PM
Bumping b4 I go too class

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 03:46 PM
BUMPEDBUMPED

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 09:12 PM
I'll try my best to add 3 pages today

MidasTouch
12-07-2015, 11:26 PM
New Page Added+

PolarisHD
12-08-2015, 01:56 AM
Free bump for this underrated story.

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 02:24 AM
Free bump for this underrated story.

lol thanks i know i promised 3 pages but I had a study group today lol

PolarisHD
12-08-2015, 02:28 AM
lol thanks i know i promised 3 pages but I had a study group today lol

It's fine lol. Besides, you said that you'll try your best to make 3 pages which means that you may or may not be able to make 3 pages. Also, it can't be helped since you had a study group.

Ceyx_GrowT
12-08-2015, 02:35 AM
Started reading.

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 02:50 AM
It's fine lol. Besides, you said that you'll try your best to make 3 pages which means that you may or may not be able to make 3 pages. Also, it can't be helped since you had a study group.

I'll try to get one out for tonight though

And thanks for reading ^^^

|ThyLuigi|
12-08-2015, 03:04 AM
You should put more detail in the environment, I want to picture what I'm reading in my head.

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 03:11 AM
You should put more detail in the environment, I want to picture what I'm reading in my head.

Ah, thanks.

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 03:49 AM
New Page Added+

GummiBear64
12-08-2015, 03:59 AM
I only read the first part. It's ok, I'll read it all eventually.

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 05:37 AM
Last bump of the night

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 09:49 PM
bumped page nine is otw

lukj2001
12-08-2015, 09:59 PM
The story is about a japanese/american boy willing to risk lives to destroy america in modern day 2001.


It stand's for High blood pressure. Telling why it's called that would spoil the story.

Code Geass

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 10:08 PM
Code Geass
lelouche was born in japan and america is already at war with them and they fight with giant robots and sharingan

lukj2001
12-08-2015, 10:10 PM
lelouche was born in japan and america is already at war with them and they fight with giant robots and sharingan

Lol...sharingan ffs

MidasTouch
12-08-2015, 10:43 PM
Eight page:
Skyla sleeping on Hideki's lap was really sweet.

I couldn't really imagine some burn scars forming a Japanese flag, but that's pretty cool.

Yep. Lowry is alive. lol

Holy :poop:. I did not see that coming. Seems like Hideki now has an enemy that is on his level.

Can't wait to see the two of them fight the next chapter.[/SPOILER]

Based somewhat on this https://i.imgur.com/oZK5i.jpg

PolarisHD
12-08-2015, 10:52 PM
Based somewhat on this https://i.imgur.com/oZK5i.jpg

Oh, okay. So I guess that he has a circle scar on his back.

MidasTouch
12-09-2015, 01:05 AM
Page Added+ Sorry if this was too short.
[WARNING: SPOILER]
The Japanese song Hideki was singing was Kimigayo. The National Anthem for Japan.

MidasTouch
12-09-2015, 02:03 AM
Ninth page:
Even though they didn't 1v1, that was intense as hell.

So in the end, Julia and Skyla sided with Roy. Was pretty bummed out, but I was expecting that since they weren't that psychotic.

Wait, is this the end? I don't see something like "Tenth page coming soon". Hopefully not, since there would be a lot of questions that are left unanswered like "Does Hideki die?". [/SPOILER]

My bad. I'll try my absolute hardest to get the tenth page out by tonight.

PolarisHD
12-09-2015, 02:18 AM
My bad. I'll try my absolute hardest to get the tenth page out by tonight.

Just to avoid misunderstandings, I'm not forcing you to release the chapters faster. Just take your time. xD

Anyway, I'm glad that it was just a mistake, because the ending of the 9th page seemed like an ending and you didn't include "10th page coming soon", so I just automatically assumed that the series ended. lol

Recently, I've been finding myself getting hyped for the next chapter whenever I remember this series. Keep up the great work. (https://encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcQ_8oqhsERMR0w_Rhj3glL-xXOK777a-gtQbOkcLqUHIV31NOJN)

MidasTouch
12-09-2015, 03:23 AM
Just to avoid misunderstandings, I'm not forcing you to release the chapters faster. Just take your time. xD

Anyway, I'm glad that it was just a mistake, because the ending of the 9th page seemed like an ending and you didn't include "10th page coming soon", so I just automatically assumed that the series ended. lol

Recently, I've been finding myself getting hyped for the next chapter whenever I remember this series. Keep up the great work. (https://encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcQ_8oqhsERMR0w_Rhj3glL-xXOK777a-gtQbOkcLqUHIV31NOJN)

u r my only fan but i still love u

MidasTouch
12-09-2015, 05:00 AM
just a lil bump

MidasTouch
12-10-2015, 01:37 AM
Added Page + Kinda graphic

|ThyLuigi|
12-10-2015, 02:13 AM
Lovin' the last few pages, but you've gotta add just a smidge more detail into certain parts for it to be perfect, for example, "3 died and 4 ran away", add what the people looked like and what the environment was like afterwards, it'll add to the contentand build more anticipation to what'll happen next.

MidasTouch
12-10-2015, 02:28 AM
Lovin' the last few pages, but you've gotta add just a smidge more detail into certain parts for it to be perfect, for example, "3 died and 4 ran away", add what the people looked like and what the environment was like afterwards, it'll add to the contentand build more anticipation to what'll happen next.

Thanks Ill keep that in mind when writing part 2

MidasTouch
12-10-2015, 12:34 PM
Tenth page:
Nice Oregairu reference.

Hideki is now on the same level as Roy. Nice.

*** R.I.P. Juliet

Hachiman too OP

Hideki is so strong that he can just impregnate a woman just by tapping into her stomach lol. Was it the HBP's power or was it Hideki's?

R.I.P. Juliet x Hideki ship. Whose father is it? The narrator said it Hideki gave Juliet Roy's child, but Juliet said it was Hideki's.

Was really surprised at that plot twist wherein Hideki said that he asked Juliet to be in his tram not because of her being good with chemical stuff, but because she was the healthiest woman Hideki knew to bear his child.

I wondered if the recent stuff going on was all along Hideki's plan. If it isn't, then what was the purpose of Juliet bearing his child?

Those fighting scenes were intense. Had me at the edge of my seat.

Nice way to end Part 1. Can't wait for Part 2. Will definitely read it once it comes out.[/SPOILER]
spoiler af
Juliet didn't know Hideki was in possession of Roy's body. But she knew enough too know she was impregnated. And it was lol.

there was also an undertale ref

PolarisHD
12-10-2015, 01:14 PM
spoiler af
Juliet didn't know Hideki was in possession of Roy's body. But she knew enough too know she was impregnated. And it was lol.

there was also an undertale ref

But didn't she just grab Hideki (in Roy's body) and said "Go ---- yourself, Hideki"?

All I know about Undertale is that it's a famous game rn. lol

MidasTouch
12-10-2015, 09:03 PM
But didn't she just grab Hideki (in Roy's body) and said "Go ---- yourself, Hideki"?

All I know about Undertale is that it's a famous game rn. lol

she knew that Hideki killed Roy and blew her up.

PolarisHD
12-10-2015, 09:06 PM
she knew that Hideki killed Roy and blew her up.

Oh, okay. .

MidasTouch
12-11-2015, 12:21 AM
bumped pls read and i will be in ur debt forever

MidasTouch
12-11-2015, 09:45 PM
Part 2 coming out like tonight maybe

MidasTouch
12-12-2015, 06:09 PM
slight bump while i ruin man of the hbp

|ThyLuigi|
12-12-2015, 11:29 PM
I want part two
gimmeh

:rolleyes:

MidasTouch
12-13-2015, 02:19 AM
PART 2 OUT I HAVE RUINED CHRISTMAS

MidasTouch
12-13-2015, 03:20 AM
please read my 3 year old writing

|ThyLuigi|
12-13-2015, 03:43 AM
Did you write this at McDonald's, because I'm Lovin' it.

MidasTouch
12-13-2015, 04:00 AM
Did you write this at McDonald's, because I'm Lovin' it.

im lovin u.

MidasTouch
12-13-2015, 01:50 PM
cmon just **************************** read it

MidasTouch
12-13-2015, 03:51 PM
read more or you will die of english

MidasTouch
12-13-2015, 06:34 PM
second page coming out in when i ******* feel like it na jk prolly tonight

MidasTouch
12-13-2015, 08:53 PM
How is Hide 16 when his mother is 21?

Never expected Juliet to be with Gintoki. lol

So Gintoki is now a nice guy. I wonder what happened.

Now that answers the question from my previous review.

Seems like Hideki is going to be killed by Hide. Based on the book the cop was reading.

Great start.

yesss i love ur inputs

juliet isnt 21 my bad shes 32 idk why it said 21

PolarisHD
12-14-2015, 06:16 AM
yesss i love ur inputs

juliet isnt 21 my bad shes 32 idk why it said 21

http://i3.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/745/485/400.gif

Oh, that makes sense now lol. I was thinking it was because both of his fathers had super powers and stuff and it was a supernatural thing wherein he grows up really quick. xD

MidasTouch
12-16-2015, 02:43 AM
This story is on hiatus for like a week or so.

MidasTouch
12-16-2015, 03:10 AM
read my new **** http://www.rtsoft.com/forums/showthread.php?286423-Napoleon-s-Horror-Story-Page-One&p=2061635#post2061635

XXXxxWomen_HuntrxxXXX
12-26-2015, 05:31 AM
Regarding The Man of the HBP and Napoleon's Horror Show. I will now be uploading them unto WattPad. It'll take me a while to get the stories already up onto WattPad but I'll try.